Note: This ballot was opened for revision 03 and is now closed.
Summary: Needs a YES.
I am not so sure if this is a "framework" or if it is more an
overview of all sorts of management aspects of L3VPN.
I have had simialr feelings woth earlier "framework" documents,
so I will leave it to the responsible AD to see if the title
might better be changed.
Section 1.1 (inlcuding reference to RFC2119) seems completely
useless, becasue these terms are not used in this document
(as far as I can tell)
I see IPSec spelles with capital S. I am sure the sec ADs want
it spelled as IPsec!
I would not speak of "information bases" but instead about
"management information" ormaybe "management objects"
I would change "standard MIB" into "standards track MIB Module"
sect 4.1 again speaks about "standard protocols such as..."
Much better to speak of "standards track protocols..."
But even then, NetConf is target for standards track but is still
in WG last Call.
I doubt that RFC2629 is a NORMATIVE reference!
Joel is OK with the new version and so am I.
Joel Halpern's review seems to point out some issues with scoping of this
document - use of rather grandiose titles of some sections without the content
to support it. Comments solicited.
Reviewed by Joel Halpern, Gen-ART
Some wording seems improvable - full review in document log