Ballot for draft-ietf-grow-bmp-peer-up
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Title/Abstract/Introduction: Please expand BMP at least once near the beginning of the draft (RFC 7854 does that in the title). Section 5: While I like the 'rearrangement of the deck chairs' language, it might not be the best when writing for an international audience.
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The shepherd writeup asks why this should have the status it does, but this wasn't answered. I am otherwise disappointed that I have no reason to DISCUSS John's document.
** Abstract and Section 1 The changes in this document are formal only, compliant implementations of RFC 7854, RFC 8671 and RFC 9069 also comply with this specification. -- I am unable to parse this sentence. What does it mean? For example, do documents make "informal changes"? -- In what way is RFC8671 and RFC9069 updated? ** Section 5. Editorial. This rearrangement of deck chairs does not change the underlying security issues inherent in the existing [RFC7854]. Consider restating this text more clearly without using the Titanic (?) metaphor. NEW This document does not alter the security considerations of RFC7854 which continue to apply.
Thanks for the work done in this document. Some editorial suggestions/comments below (they can be ignored): Should BMP be expanded in the abstract (or even in the title) ? Unsure whether the leading text of section 3 is useful as the 3.* subsections are rather short and clear. Section 2, suggest to use "UTF-8 string" as the name; is it useful to define this type, which is used only once ? Section 3.1, isn't there some contradictions between `The Information field contains *a* string (Section 2)` and `If *multiple* strings are included` ? It is at least unclear to me. Section 3.3, defining the semantic and syntax of "information" in the description of "Information Type" seems weird and unusual. Section 5, it is a matter of taste of course, but isn't `This rearrangement of deck chairs` a little too informal ?