Update to OSPF Terminology
draft-ietf-lsr-ospf-terminology-09

[Ballot comment]
# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-lsr-ospf-terminology-07

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Gyan S. Mishra for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/nivmH8c3YlgBr7JSoG7isGH1Vgo).

## Comments

### DOWNREFs

DOWNREF `[RFC5243]` from this Proposed Standard to Informational `RFC5243`.
(For IESG discussion. It seems this DOWNREF was not mentioned in the Last Call
and also seems to not appear in the DOWNREF registry.)

DOWNREF `[RFC5614]` from this Proposed Standard to Experimental `RFC5614`. (For
IESG discussion. It seems this DOWNREF was not mentioned in the Last Call and
also seems to not appear in the DOWNREF registry.)

DOWNREF `[RFC4811]` from this Proposed Standard to Informational `RFC4811`.
(For IESG discussion. It seems this DOWNREF was not mentioned in the Last Call
and also seems to not appear in the DOWNREF registry.)

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 6, paragraph 1
```
and all instances of "Slave" will be rename to "Follower". 7. Update to RFC
                                  ^^^^^^^^^
```
There may an error in the verb form "be rename".

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool

[Ballot comment]
I am a little puzzled by a standalone document that changes these words. Implementers are still forced to read the original RFCs this document updates and the original words are all over the place in those documents. It would have made more sense to me to incorporate these new words in bis documents.
I agree with Eric that IANA should keep the old name in a note for clarification.

[Ballot comment]
I find interesting that this update to be more inclusive has non-inclusive abstract and introduction... There are more than 200 countries (if not mistaken) and readers can genuinely wonder which one is referred by "National Institute of Standards and Technology" (of course, most readers knowing the IETF will guess the NIST of the USA).

I also wonder whether IANA should keep the old name of the L bit in a footnote or so.

[Ballot discuss]
Section 2 "Updates to RFC2328" is missing reference to section 10.3. "The Neighbor state machine" of RFC 2328. Non-inclusive language is used for the "State(s): Init, Event: 2-WayReceived" and "State(s): Exchange or greater, Event: SeqNumberMismatch".

[Ballot comment]
Nits:

Section 2 uses both leader/follower and Leader/Follower. Use one or the other.

Section 5 text is referring to Figure 2 of RFC4811 and should probably say this in the text to be more specific.

Section 8 the text " Figure 1: RFC 5838, Section 2.4 - Updated First Paragraph" - is this meant to be here as there is no figure?

[Ballot comment]
# Internet AD comments for draft-ietf-lsr-ospf-terminology-06
CC @ekline

## Nits

### S2

* s/froming/forming/

### S5

* s/when referring the/when referencing the/

  or

  s/when referring the/when referring to the/

### S7

* s/Addiitionally/Additionally/

(Via drafts-lastcall@iana.org): IESG/Authors/WG Chairs:

The IANA Functions Operator has completed its review of draft-ietf-lsr-ospf-terminology-04. If any part of this review is inaccurate, please let us know.

The IANA Functions Operator understands that, upon approval of this document, there is a single action which we must complete.

In the OSPF Database Description (DD) Packet Flags registry located at:

https://www.iana.org/assignments/ospf-dd-packet-flags/

the existing registration for:

Value: 0x01
Description: Master/Slave (MS-bit)
Reference: [RFC2328]

will be changed to:

Value: 0x01
Description: Leader (L-bit)
Reference: [RFC2328][ RFC-to-be ]

The IANA Functions Operator understands that this is the only action required to be completed upon approval of this document.

Note:  The actions requested in this document will not be completed until the document has been approved for publication as an RFC. This message is meant only to confirm the list of actions that will be performed.

For definitions of IANA review states, please see:

https://datatracker.ietf.org/help/state/draft/iana-review

Thank you,

David Dong
IANA Services Specialist

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Sender:
Subject: Last Call:  (Update to OSPF Terminology) to Proposed Standard


The IESG has received a request from the Link State Routing WG (lsr) to
consider the following document: - 'Update to OSPF Terminology'
  as Proposed Standard

The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits final
comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
last-call@ietf.org mailing lists by 2023-05-03. Exceptionally, comments may
be sent to iesg@ietf.org instead. In either case, please retain the beginning
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Abstract


  This document updates some OSPF terminology to be in line with
  inclusive language used in the industry.  The IETF has designated
  National Institute of Standards and Technology (NIST) "Guidance for
  NIST Staff on Using Inclusive Language in Documentary Standards" for
  its inclusive language guidelines.

  This document updates RFC2328, RFC5340, RFC4222, RFC4811, RFC5243,
  RFC5614, and RFC5838.




The file can be obtained via
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-lsr-ospf-terminology/



No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.

# Document Shepherd Write-Up for Group Documents

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  in [RFC 8342][5]?

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    [Informational, Experimental or Historic][14])? Why is this the proper type
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Standards track. This document makes small updates in terminology to multiple standards track documents.

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    property rights (IPR) disclosure obligations described in [BCP 79][7]? To
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    some incorrect warnings; a rewrite is underway.)

None.

15. Should any informative references be normative or vice-versa? See the [IESG
    Statement on Normative and Informative References][16].

No.

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    the community have sufficient access to review any such normative
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None.

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    97][10]) that are not already listed in the [DOWNREF registry][17]? If so,
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** Downref: Normative reference to an Informational RFC: RFC 4811
** Downref: Normative reference to an Informational RFC: RFC 5243
** Downref: Normative reference to an Experimental RFC: RFC 5614


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It updates: 2328 5340 4222 4811 5243 5614 5838

This is listed in the title, the abstract and discussed in the introduction.

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    especially with regard to its consistency with the body of the document.
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    that each newly created IANA registry specifies its initial contents,
    allocations procedures, and a reasonable name (see [RFC 8126][11]).

Reviewed section, it is consistent with the rest of the document about terminology update.

21. List any new IANA registries that require Designated Expert Review for
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    Please include suggestions of designated experts, if appropriate.

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# Document Shepherd Write-Up for Group Documents

*This version is dated 4 July 2022.*

Thank you for your service as a document shepherd. Among the responsibilities is
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## Document History

1. Does the working group (WG) consensus represent the strong concurrence of a
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Broad agreement.

2. Was there controversy about particular points, or were there decisions where
  the consensus was particularly rough?

No controversy.

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## Additional Reviews

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  been checked with any of the [recommended validation tools][4] for syntax and
  formatting validation? If there are any resulting errors or warnings, what is
  the justification for not fixing them at this time? Does the YANG module
  comply with the Network Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA) as specified
  in [RFC 8342][5]?

N/A

8. Describe reviews and automated checks performed to validate sections of the
  final version of the document written in a formal language, such as XML code,
  BNF rules, MIB definitions, CBOR's CDDL, etc.

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## Document Shepherd Checks

9. Based on the shepherd's review of the document, is it their opinion that this
  document is needed, clearly written, complete, correctly designed, and ready
  to be handed off to the responsible Area Director?

Yes.

10. Several IETF Areas have assembled [lists of common issues that their
    reviewers encounter][6]. For which areas have such issues been identified
    and addressed? For which does this still need to happen in subsequent
    reviews?

Not required.

11. What type of RFC publication is being requested on the IETF stream ([Best
    Current Practice][12], [Proposed Standard, Internet Standard][13],
    [Informational, Experimental or Historic][14])? Why is this the proper type
    of RFC? Do all Datatracker state attributes correctly reflect this intent?

Standards track. This document makes small updates in terminology to multiple standards track documents.

12. Have reasonable efforts been made to remind all authors of the intellectual
    property rights (IPR) disclosure obligations described in [BCP 79][7]? To
    the best of your knowledge, have all required disclosures been filed? If
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    is greater than five, please provide a justification.

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14. Document any remaining I-D nits in this document. Simply running the [idnits
    tool][8] is not enough; please review the ["Content Guidelines" on
    authors.ietf.org][15]. (Also note that the current idnits tool generates
    some incorrect warnings; a rewrite is underway.)

None.

15. Should any informative references be normative or vice-versa? See the [IESG
    Statement on Normative and Informative References][16].

No.

16. List any normative references that are not freely available to anyone. Did
    the community have sufficient access to review any such normative
    references?

None.

17. Are there any normative downward references (see [RFC 3967][9] and [BCP
    97][10]) that are not already listed in the [DOWNREF registry][17]? If so,
    list them.

** Downref: Normative reference to an Informational RFC: RFC 4811
** Downref: Normative reference to an Informational RFC: RFC 5243
** Downref: Normative reference to an Experimental RFC: RFC 5614


18. Are there normative references to documents that are not ready to be
    submitted to the IESG for publication or are otherwise in an unclear state?
    If so, what is the plan for their completion?

No.

19. Will publication of this document change the status of any existing RFCs? If
    so, does the Datatracker metadata correctly reflect this and are those RFCs
    listed on the title page, in the abstract, and discussed in the
    introduction? If not, explain why and point to the part of the document
    where the relationship of this document to these other RFCs is discussed.

It updates: 2328 5340 4222 4811 5243 5614 5838

This is listed in the title, the abstract and discussed in the introduction.

20. Describe the document shepherd's review of the IANA considerations section,
    especially with regard to its consistency with the body of the document.
    Confirm that all aspects of the document requiring IANA assignments are
    associated with the appropriate reservations in IANA registries. Confirm
    that any referenced IANA registries have been clearly identified. Confirm
    that each newly created IANA registry specifies its initial contents,
    allocations procedures, and a reasonable name (see [RFC 8126][11]).

Reviewed section, it is consistent with the rest of the document about terminology update.

21. List any new IANA registries that require Designated Expert Review for
    future allocations. Are the instructions to the Designated Expert clear?
    Please include suggestions of designated experts, if appropriate.

None.

# Document Shepherd Write-Up for Group Documents

*This version is dated 4 July 2022.*

Thank you for your service as a document shepherd. Among the responsibilities is
answering the questions in this write-up to give helpful context to Last Call
and Internet Engineering Steering Group ([IESG][1]) reviewers, and your
diligence in completing it is appreciated. The full role of the shepherd is
further described in [RFC 4858][2]. You will need the cooperation of the authors
and editors to complete these checks.

Note that some numbered items contain multiple related questions; please be sure
to answer all of them.

## Document History

1. Does the working group (WG) consensus represent the strong concurrence of a
  few individuals, with others being silent, or did it reach broad agreement?

Broad agreement.

2. Was there controversy about particular points, or were there decisions where
  the consensus was particularly rough?

No controversy.

3. Has anyone threatened an appeal or otherwise indicated extreme discontent? If
  so, please summarize the areas of conflict in separate email messages to the
  responsible Area Director. (It should be in a separate email because this
  questionnaire is publicly available.)

No appeals threatened.

4. For protocol documents, are there existing implementations of the contents of
  the document? Have a significant number of potential implementers indicated
  plans to implement? Are any existing implementations reported somewhere,
  either in the document itself (as [RFC 7942][3] recommends) or elsewhere
  (where)?

N/A

## Additional Reviews

5. Do the contents of this document closely interact with technologies in other
  IETF working groups or external organizations, and would it therefore benefit
  from their review? Have those reviews occurred? If yes, describe which
  reviews took place.

No additional review needed.

6. Describe how the document meets any required formal expert review criteria,
  such as the MIB Doctor, YANG Doctor, media type, and URI type reviews.

N/A

7. If the document contains a YANG module, has the final version of the module
  been checked with any of the [recommended validation tools][4] for syntax and
  formatting validation? If there are any resulting errors or warnings, what is
  the justification for not fixing them at this time? Does the YANG module
  comply with the Network Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA) as specified
  in [RFC 8342][5]?

N/A

8. Describe reviews and automated checks performed to validate sections of the
  final version of the document written in a formal language, such as XML code,
  BNF rules, MIB definitions, CBOR's CDDL, etc.

N/A

## Document Shepherd Checks

9. Based on the shepherd's review of the document, is it their opinion that this
  document is needed, clearly written, complete, correctly designed, and ready
  to be handed off to the responsible Area Director?

Yes.

10. Several IETF Areas have assembled [lists of common issues that their
    reviewers encounter][6]. For which areas have such issues been identified
    and addressed? For which does this still need to happen in subsequent
    reviews?

Not required.

11. What type of RFC publication is being requested on the IETF stream ([Best
    Current Practice][12], [Proposed Standard, Internet Standard][13],
    [Informational, Experimental or Historic][14])? Why is this the proper type
    of RFC? Do all Datatracker state attributes correctly reflect this intent?

Standards track. This document makes small updates in terminology to multiple standards track documents.

12. Have reasonable efforts been made to remind all authors of the intellectual
    property rights (IPR) disclosure obligations described in [BCP 79][7]? To
    the best of your knowledge, have all required disclosures been filed? If
    not, explain why. If yes, summarize any relevant discussion, including links
    to publicly-available messages when applicable.

Yes.

13. Has each author, editor, and contributor shown their willingness to be
    listed as such? If the total number of authors and editors on the front page
    is greater than five, please provide a justification.

Yes.

14. Document any remaining I-D nits in this document. Simply running the [idnits
    tool][8] is not enough; please review the ["Content Guidelines" on
    authors.ietf.org][15]. (Also note that the current idnits tool generates
    some incorrect warnings; a rewrite is underway.)

None.

15. Should any informative references be normative or vice-versa? See the [IESG
    Statement on Normative and Informative References][16].

No.

16. List any normative references that are not freely available to anyone. Did
    the community have sufficient access to review any such normative
    references?

None.

17. Are there any normative downward references (see [RFC 3967][9] and [BCP
    97][10]) that are not already listed in the [DOWNREF registry][17]? If so,
    list them.

No.

18. Are there normative references to documents that are not ready to be
    submitted to the IESG for publication or are otherwise in an unclear state?
    If so, what is the plan for their completion?

No.

19. Will publication of this document change the status of any existing RFCs? If
    so, does the Datatracker metadata correctly reflect this and are those RFCs
    listed on the title page, in the abstract, and discussed in the
    introduction? If not, explain why and point to the part of the document
    where the relationship of this document to these other RFCs is discussed.

It updates: 2328 5340 4222 4811 5243 5614 5838

This is listed in the title, the abstract and discussed in the introduction.

20. Describe the document shepherd's review of the IANA considerations section,
    especially with regard to its consistency with the body of the document.
    Confirm that all aspects of the document requiring IANA assignments are
    associated with the appropriate reservations in IANA registries. Confirm
    that any referenced IANA registries have been clearly identified. Confirm
    that each newly created IANA registry specifies its initial contents,
    allocations procedures, and a reasonable name (see [RFC 8126][11]).

Reviewed section, it is consistent with the rest of the document about terminology update.

21. List any new IANA registries that require Designated Expert Review for
    future allocations. Are the instructions to the Designated Expert clear?
    Please include suggestions of designated experts, if appropriate.

None.