Last Call Review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05
review-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05-genart-lc-dupont-2017-12-11-00

Request Review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-12-08
Requested 2017-11-02
Other Reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Nevil Brownlee (diff)
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Review State Completed
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review review-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05-genart-lc-dupont-2017-12-11
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/BkA3MNFQT-PcUsKJMMa2z_Eacvo
Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready
Draft last updated 2017-12-11
Review completed: 2017-12-11

Review
review-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05-genart-lc-dupont-2017-12-11

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Document: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20171124
IETF LC End Date: 20171208
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 2 and 11 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: please expand abbrev in at the first use in the body
  for URN (optional as it is a well known abbrev according to
  https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt),
  NSS and MEID.

 - 1 page 2: please mark the RFC 5626 quote as a quote (e.g., in its
  own paragraph with a few spaces more for indentation.

 - 2 page 3: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174 (note the RFC Editor
  will update this section if you don't)

 - 5 page 4: UAC abbrev was not introduces: I believe it stands for
  User Agent Client (so it is bad practice but the text is not ambiguous)

 - 9 page 6: I suggest to remove the comma in
  "Entities that log the instance-id, need ..."
  (but if you prefer to keep it I shan't object)

 - 9 page 6: IPSec -> IPsec

 - 11.1 [5] page 7: RFC 2119 -> 8174

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr