Last Call Review of draft-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02
review-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02-genart-lc-gurbani-2016-02-26-00

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Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 03)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-01-05
Requested 2015-12-10
Draft last updated 2016-02-26
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -02 by Vijay Gurbani (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -03 by Vijay Gurbani
Opsdir Last Call review of -02 by Jon Mitchell (diff)
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Review review-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02-genart-lc-gurbani-2016-02-26
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Review completed: 2016-02-26

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Document: draft-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Feb-26-2016
IETF LC End Date: Not known
IESG Telechat date: Not known

This document is ready as a BCP, however, it does have 1 Minor issue
that I detail below.

Major: 0
Minor: 1
Nits: 0

Minor:
- S1, "Other RAI working groups develop extensions to SIP that do not
 change the core protocol, new applications of SIP, and other
 technologies for interactive communication among humans."

 Are we intentionally limiting interactive communications only to
 "humans"?  I would suspect that this would be limiting, no?  A
 bunch of SIP SUBS/NOTs happen between automaton, or machines.
 Surely we don't want to exclude these in the future.  My suggestion
 would be to simply take out the phrase "among humans".

Thanks,

- vijay
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