IETF Last Call Review of draft-farrell-tls-pemesni-11
review-farrell-tls-pemesni-11-genart-lc-dunbar-2025-12-30-00

Request Review of draft-farrell-tls-pemesni
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type IETF Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2026-01-01
Requested 2025-12-04
Authors Stephen Farrell
I-D last updated 2026-03-04 (Latest revision 2026-01-23)
Completed reviews Dnsdir IETF Last Call review of -11 by Jim Reid (diff)
Genart IETF Last Call review of -11 by Linda Dunbar (diff)
Dnsdir Telechat review of -12 by Jim Reid (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Linda Dunbar
State Completed
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Reviewed revision 11 (document currently at 13)
Result Ready w/issues
Completed 2025-12-30
review-farrell-tls-pemesni-11-genart-lc-dunbar-2025-12-30-00
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Document: draft-farrell-tls-pemesni-11
Reviewer: Linda Dunbar
Review Date: 2025-12-30
IETF LC End Date: 2026-01-01
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues: None

Minor issues:

- The phrase "as an ECHConfigList containing an ECHConfig that matches the
private key"  of the following sentence is hard to parse: "The file contains
the concatenation of the PEM encoding of the private key (if present) followed
by the PEM encoding of the public key as an ECHConfigList containing an
ECHConfig that matches the private key"

Do you mean "contains a PEM-encoded ECHConfigList whose embedded public key
corresponds to that private key"?

- PEM ECH file” vs “ECHConfig PEM file: are they the same?

Nits/editorial comments:

Typo:
“mechanims” -> “mechanisms” in Security Considerations.
“clarificatrion” -> “clarification” in Appendix A.

Warm Regards,
Linda Dunbar