Last Call Review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-02

Request Review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 06)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-02-14
Requested 2017-01-17
Other Reviews Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Chris Lonvick (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -03 by Rick Casarez (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -03 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Chris Lonvick (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review review-freytag-lager-variant-rules-02-genart-lc-dupont-2017-01-24
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Reviewed rev. 02 (document currently at 06)
Review result Not Ready
Draft last updated 2017-01-24
Review completed: 2017-01-24


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Document: draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-02.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170121
IETF LC End Date: 20170214
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Not Ready

Major issues: this document is not understable at all without a
previous reading of RFC7940

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - IDN is not a well known abbrev so must be expanded in Abstract
  and in the body (cf for the list of abbrevs

 - title page 1: likely should be changed to include more context

 - ToC page 1 and A page 19: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: please add more context from the beginning
  (or simply stands that to read the document one must know RFC 7940)


Francis.Dupont at

PS: I have not (yet) read RFC 7940 (I review paper I-Ds in public
transportation so without access to the RFC collection  :-).