Last Call Review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05
review-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05-genart-lc-dupont-2017-05-17-00

Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Title Last Call Review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05
Request Last Call - requested 2017-04-17
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review result Ready with Nits
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/J3q4tVT00zcfV8VfvaSqWgotPsA
Last updated 2017-05-17

Review
review-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05-genart-lc-dupont-2017-05-17

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Document: draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170516
IETF LC End Date: 20170515
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready with Nits

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - 1 page 2: as the document cannot be understood without reading the
  RFC 7940 the reference to RFC 79040 must be moved as early as
  possible (I suggest just after the LGRs introduction and the warning
  "However, the reader is expected to have some familiarity..." emphased
  and moved to earlier in the section.
 (I already raised thos concern at my first review, it wasn't fixed
 but for this second review I had the 82 pages of RFC 7940 with me :-)

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

PS: I don't think it will work for the languages I used but it is
an information document based on some experiments so what matters
is it can help even it is not for general cases...