Last Call Review of draft-iesg-nomcom-eligibility-2020-01
review-iesg-nomcom-eligibility-2020-01-genart-lc-robles-2020-04-30-00

Request Review of draft-iesg-nomcom-eligibility-2020
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 03)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2020-04-30
Requested 2020-04-02
Authors Barry Leiba
Draft last updated 2020-04-30
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -01 by Ines Robles (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -00 by Magnus Nystrom (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Ines Robles
State Completed
Review review-iesg-nomcom-eligibility-2020-01-genart-lc-robles-2020-04-30
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/zhbwZ4cPu8vvmmva70ZSLWBx7Rc
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Review completed: 2020-04-30

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Document: draft-iesg-nomcom-eligibility-2020-01
Reviewer: Ines Robles
Review Date: 2020-04-30
IETF LC End Date: 2020-04-30
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

This document provides a one-time interpretation of the eligibility rules (BCP 10) that is required
for the exceptional situation of the cancellation of the in-person IETF 107 meeting.
This document only affects the seating of the 2020-2021 NomCom and any rules that relate
to NomCom eligibility or process before IETF 108, and does not set a precedent for the future.

The document is clear and well written. Please find some comments below.

Major issues: Not found
Minor issues: Not found
Nits/editorial comments:

Some comments/questions:

1- It would be nice to add a reference here

Section 1:

"...resulting in its conversion to a limited-agenda virtual meeting, with remote
   participation only.":

   e.g. [IETF 107 Virtual] = https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ietf-announce/Gqc4-GIsnvccObQrrciL_Vm0HMU/

2- Should this clarification be added?

" ...before IETF 108..." --> "...before IETF 108 (virtual or in-person meeting)..." e.g. in the introduction or in section 3.

3- Related to this comment [https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ietf/kHVPn0tyF5o4Rvd3aZ51JA2MDtU/]

"... In section 2, last paragraph, I suggest changing the CREF to, "Note: The previous two sentences will be replaced
before publication with, 'This document contains the outcome of that discussion.'...."

  Should this suggestion be applied?

  Note that CREF2 mentions "the previous sentence", not "the previous two sentences...."


4- It would be nice to add a reference to eligibility-discuss mailing list/ draft-carpenter-eligibility-expand

Section 3:

"...as there will be time for proper community work on such an update..."

Thus, e.g. "...community work on such an update (e.g. efforts such as [Eligibility-discuss-ml] and [Eligibility-criteria])"

[Eligibility-discuss-ml]= https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/eligibility-discuss/
[Eligibility-criteria]= https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-carpenter-eligibility-expand/


Thank you for this document,

Ines.