Last Call Review of draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 15) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | Ops Directorate (opsdir) | |
Deadline | 2020-01-31 | |
Requested | 2020-01-17 | |
Authors | Thomas Watteyne , Pascal Thubert , Carsten Bormann | |
I-D last updated | 2020-01-31 | |
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by Dave Thaler
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Iotdir Last Call review of -04 by Ines Robles (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Derrell Piper (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Sarah Banks (diff) Tsvart Last Call review of -07 by Joerg Ott (diff) Genart Last Call review of -08 by Francesca Palombini (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Sarah Banks |
State | Completed Snapshot | |
Review |
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31
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Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/Bw7GJfL_qs4oZ3aEyG8Z6E9Xy6Y | |
Reviewed revision | 09 (document currently at 15) | |
Result | Has Nits | |
Completed | 2020-01-31 |
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31-00
Hi, Thanks for a well written, technical draft. I have no comments that stop publication, however, I do have a couple of editorial comments to make, focused mostly at the top of the document. Also, thanks for a doc clean of nits, much appreciated! - While I find the language overall to be very approachable, in the 1. Introduction section, you wrote "till" - please consider replacing with "until". - Also in the Introduction section, you wrote "performances may fall behind..." - it wasn't clear which multiples of performances you were referring to - be specific, or consider revising "performances" to "performance". - I found the draft assumes serious familiarity of the reader on the subject. For example, in Section 2.2, first para, "Past experience with fragmentation" - I found myself wondering "whose past experience"? You might consider tightening up the language here to be clear. I'll also add that including a decent list of follow up docs was greatly appreciated, thanks! That will be helpful to a broader audience. Thanks, Sarah