Last Call Review of draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 15) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | Ops Directorate (opsdir) | |
| Deadline | 2020-01-31 | |
| Requested | 2020-01-17 | |
| Authors | Thomas Watteyne , Pascal Thubert , Carsten Bormann | |
| Draft last updated | 2020-01-31 | |
| Completed reviews |
Intdir Last Call review of -04
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Dave Thaler
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Iotdir Last Call review of -04 by Ines Robles (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Derrell Piper (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Sarah Banks (diff) Tsvart Last Call review of -07 by Joerg Ott (diff) Genart Last Call review of -08 by Francesca Palombini (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Sarah Banks |
| State | Completed Snapshot | |
| Review |
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31
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| Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/Bw7GJfL_qs4oZ3aEyG8Z6E9Xy6Y | |
| Reviewed revision | 09 (document currently at 15) | |
| Result | Has Nits | |
| Completed | 2020-01-31 |
review-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-09-opsdir-lc-banks-2020-01-31-00
Hi,
Thanks for a well written, technical draft. I have no comments that stop
publication, however, I do have a couple of editorial comments to make,
focused mostly at the top of the document. Also, thanks for a doc clean of
nits, much appreciated!
- While I find the language overall to be very approachable, in the 1.
Introduction section, you wrote "till" - please consider replacing with
"until". - Also in the Introduction section, you wrote "performances may fall
behind..." - it wasn't clear which multiples of performances you were referring
to - be specific, or consider revising "performances" to "performance". - I
found the draft assumes serious familiarity of the reader on the subject. For
example, in Section 2.2, first para, "Past experience with fragmentation" - I
found myself wondering "whose past experience"? You might consider tightening
up the language here to be clear. I'll also add that including a decent list of
follow up docs was greatly appreciated, thanks! That will be helpful to a
broader audience.
Thanks,
Sarah