Last Call Review of draft-ietf-appsawg-uri-get-off-my-lawn-04
review-ietf-appsawg-uri-get-off-my-lawn-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2014-05-07-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-appsawg-uri-get-off-my-lawn
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2014-05-07
Requested 2014-04-24
Draft last updated 2014-05-07
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -04 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -04 by Alexey Melnikov (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -04 by David Black (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-appsawg-uri-get-off-my-lawn-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2014-05-07
Reviewed rev. 04 (document currently at 05)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2014-05-07

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-appsawg-uri-get-off-my-lawn-04




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2014-05-06




IETF LC End Date:  2014-05-07




IESG Telechat date: 2014-05-15




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some editorial comments.




 




 




Nits/editorial comments:




-[Page 2], Section 1, "Because the owner of the URI (as defined in [webarch]




Section 2.2.2.1) is choosing to use the server or the software"




 




it is not clear what is meant by the part "or the software"




 




-[Page 6], Section 2.5, 




"For example, an application that defines common fragment identifiers




   across media types not controlled by it is not conforming,...




" 




suggestion for easier read:




"




For example, an application that defines common fragment identifiers




   across media types not controlled by it is said to be non-conforming, and would




"




 




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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Meral Shirazipour




Ericsson




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