Telechat Review of draft-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie-02
review-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie-02-opsdir-telechat-mitchell-2016-03-23-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 02)
Type Telechat Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2016-03-15
Requested 2016-03-11
Draft last updated 2016-03-23
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -02 by Christer Holmberg
Secdir Last Call review of -02 by Rifaat Shekh-Yusef
Opsdir Telechat review of -02 by Jon Mitchell
Assignment Reviewer Jon Mitchell
State Completed
Review review-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie-02-opsdir-telechat-mitchell-2016-03-23
Reviewed rev. 02
Review result Has Nits
Review completed: 2016-03-23

Review
review-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie-02-opsdir-telechat-mitchell-2016-03-23

I have reviewed draft-ietf-aqm-docsis-pie-02 as part of the Operational
directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being
processed by the IESG.  These comments were written with the intent of
improving the operational aspects of the IETF drafts. Comments that are
not addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the IESG
review.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
like any other last call comments.

I found the document is clear and Ready.

This is a Informational draft from the AQM WG which contains
requirements for DOCSIS (cable modems) equipment in regards to active
queue management including differences from the approach outlined in
draft-ietf-aqm-pie.

Nits/suggestions:

Section 4.2 - It seems odd to use the generic and commonly used
terminology of token bucket for the first time in this section, while
backwards referencing that is what was previously described in Section
3.  Section 3 might benefit from use of these common terms directly.

Section 5 - I found it confusing to have a reference to pseudo-code
here being assumed as understood / already seen by the reader, w/o a
reference to the Appendix where it is contained.