Last Call Review of draft-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-nw-

Request Review of draft-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-nw
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-12-11
Requested 2012-11-27
Authors Zheng Fang
Draft last updated 2012-12-12
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -?? by Peter Yee
Genart Telechat review of -09 by Peter Yee (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Tina Tsou (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Peter Yee 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-nw-genart-lc-yee-2012-12-12
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2012-12-12


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Document: draft-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-nw-08
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: Dec-11-2012
IETF LC End Date: Dec-11-2012
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a few nits
that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with nits.]

This Standards Track draft specifies RTP payload formats for use with the
EVRC-NW.  It contains IANA registration requests.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 1, 2nd sentence: decide whether you want to capitalize the packet
format names (Header-Free, Interleaved/Bundled) and then them use
consistently throughout the document.  RFC 3558 uses upper case names
mostly, but is not quite a paragon of consistency.

Section 4, 3rd sentence: change "zero bit" to "zero-bit".

Section 4, table, 1st row: insert a space after "Blank"  and adjust spacing
to maintain alignment of the columns.  Change "0 bit" to "0 bits".

Section 5, 2nd paragraph, 3rd sentence: change "8kHz" to "8 kHz".  Change
"16kHz" to "16 kHz".

Section 6, 3rd numbered item, 2nd sentence: change "identfication" to

Section 7, 1st sentence: change ";" to ",".

Section 9.1.2: change "Interoperability considertaions" to "Interoperability

Section 9.1.3, mode-set-recv paragraph, 5th sentence: change "narroband" to

Section 9.1.3: change " Interoperability considertaions" to "
Interoperability considerations".

Section 10, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete the comma after

Section 10, numbered list: I'm not sure why this is a numbered list since
the preceding paragraph makes no direct link to it.  Consider demoting the
list items to individual paragraphs.

Section 10, 1st numbered item, 1st sentence: consider rewriting "inform the
capability of " as "advertise the capability for" or "inform the capability

Section 10, 2nd numbered item, 1st sentence: rewrite "inform the" as
"indicate a".

Section 11, 2nd paragraph, 4th sentence: change "potentially-high" to
"potentially high"

Section 11, 2nd paragraph, last sentence: change "is used" to "be used".

Section 14, 2nd bullet item, 2nd sentence: capitalize "may" and "should".

Section 14, 3rd bullet item: change "receive only" to "receive-only".

I like using the serial comma (the one before "and" in a list of 3 of more
items) for clarity and to reduce confusion, but did not submit the list of
missing commas for this document -- there are a few.  Let me know if you