Last Call Review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04
review-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04-tsvart-lc-black-2021-02-16-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team Transport Area Review Team (tsvart)
Deadline 2021-02-16
Requested 2021-02-02
Authors Samer Salam, Ali Sajassi, Sam Aldrin, John Drake, Donald Eastlake
Draft last updated 2021-02-16
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -04 by Stig Venaas (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -04 by Melinda Shore (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -04 by David Schinazi (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -04 by David Black (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -07 by Melinda Shore (diff)
Assignment Reviewer David Black 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04-tsvart-lc-black-2021-02-16
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/BT69amVZJNMCNUk1Ei2QjP75YrA
Reviewed rev. 04 (document currently at 10)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2021-02-16

Review
review-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04-tsvart-lc-black-2021-02-16

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I did not notice any transport-related issues, but found a few editorial nits
that could use some attention:

The draft covers only the F (fault) and P (performance) aspects of the
FCAPS set of management/maintenance domains.  It might be useful to
say something about where to look for requirements-related information
on the other three.

Please double-check whether the IEEE 802.1Q reference is up to date.

Please explain what P nodes are in Figures 1 and 2.

Figures 1 and 2 include four OAM layers, of which this draft is only
concerned with two, Service OAM and Network OAM.  Section 2.1
should indicate that these two layers are the focus of the draft.