Last Call Review of draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01
review-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01-genart-lc-dupont-2015-09-28-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 02)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-09-24
Requested 2015-09-11
Authors David Allan , Jeff Tantsura , Don Fedyk , Ali Sajassi
I-D last updated 2015-09-28
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -01 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -01 by Dan Harkins (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -01 by Sarah Banks (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 01 (document currently at 02)
Result Ready
Completed 2015-09-28
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Document: draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150925
IETF LC End Date: 20150924
IESG Telechat date: 20151001

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Abstract page 1: my spell checker complains about subtending?
  (IMHO you should make it happy for the Abstract, i.e., change the
   Abstract wording (and only the Abstract wording)).

 - ToC page 2 and 6 page 9: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 3 page 4: Reachabilty -> Reachability

 - 4.1 page 6: may be different -> can be different (or any
  wording which doesn't use a RFC 2119 keyword even in lower case
  in an ambiguous way)

 - 4.6 page 8 (twice): SPsourceID -> SPSourceID
  (note I suppose the correct spelling is SPSourceID, anyway it can't
   be both SPsourceID and SPSourceID so the document must be fixed)

 - 6 page 9: please insert a blank line before.

 - 9.1 page 10 (twice): spurious breaks in 802.1* references

 - 10 page 11: add USA (BTW it should be formally US (ISO IS 3166
  2 letters) but the UPU says USA and it is what the first (and
  only correct) entry has...

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr