Last Call Review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16
review-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16-genart-lc-dupont-2018-05-23-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 19)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-05-21
Requested 2018-05-07
Draft last updated 2018-05-23
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -16 by Michael Richardson (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -16 by Bob Briscoe (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -16 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -18 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Tsvart Telechat review of -18 by Bob Briscoe (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16-genart-lc-dupont-2018-05-23
Reviewed rev. 16 (document currently at 19)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2018-05-23

Review
review-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16-genart-lc-dupont-2018-05-23

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Document: draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20180512
IETF LC End Date: 20180521
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready with nits

Major issues: None

Minor issues: Missing keyword section (aka RFC 2119 section).
BTW don't forget RFC8174 reference in this section...

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - 1 page 3: i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 4.4.1 page 5: example of MUST keyword use.

 - 4.6 pages 6 and 7 ("is" is in page 6, "binding" in page 7):
  "The minimum amount ... is binding to ..."
  this wording is ambiguous because binding can be both a noun and a verb.
  I suggest (for the first case) to add an article, e.g., "is the binding".

 - 7 page 17: e.g. -> e.g.,

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr