Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11

Request Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-09-02
Requested 2013-08-22
Authors Fatai Zhang, Guoying Zhang, Sergio Belotti, Daniele Ceccarelli, Khuzema Pithewan
Draft last updated 2013-08-26
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -11 by Vijay Gurbani (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Vijay Gurbani
Assignment Reviewer Vijay Gurbani 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11-genart-lc-gurbani-2013-08-26
Reviewed rev. 11 (document currently at 12)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2013-08-26


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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Aug-26-2013
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

This document is ready as an Proposed Standard.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 1


- S1, first paragraph: Expand "OTN" on first use.  Also,
 s/provided for [G709-2012]./provided for OTNs [G709-2012]./

 The last substitution above is a general comment since this construct
 appears multiple times in S1 and the rest of the document.

 Essentially, you need a label before the reference itself.  Making the
 reference itself a label seems incongruent (at least to me).  I am
 filing this as a nit, so I will let you decide whether to change it or


- vijay
Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
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