Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11
review-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11-genart-lc-black-2013-12-30-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 13) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2014-01-05 | |
| Requested | 2013-12-12 | |
| Authors | Attila Takacs , Don Fedyk , He Jia | |
| Draft last updated | 2013-12-30 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -11
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David L. Black
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Genart Telechat review of -12 by David L. Black (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -11 by Magnus Nystrom (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -11 by Warren "Ace" Kumari (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | David L. Black |
| State | Completed | |
| Review |
review-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11-genart-lc-black-2013-12-30
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| Reviewed revision | 11 (document currently at 13) | |
| Result | Ready with Nits | |
| Completed | 2013-12-30 |
review-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11-genart-lc-black-2013-12-30-00
One additional nit - Don Fedyk's email address listed in the draft does not work. Thanks, --David > -----Original Message----- > From: Black, David > Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:46 PM > To: General Area Review Team (gen-art at ietf.org); attila.takacs at ericsson.com; > donald.fedyk at alcatel-lucent.com; hejia at huawei.com > Cc: Black, David; adrian at olddog.co.uk; ccamp at ietf.org; ietf at ietf.org > Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > Reviewer: David L. Black > Review Date: December 29, 2013 > IETF LC End Date: January 5, 2014 > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be fixed before publication. > > This draft describes the GMPLS framework for signaling OAM configuration, > and specifies additional RSVP elements to support that signaling. Knowledge > of RSVP, and specifically RSVP-TE is assumed; beyond that, the draft is > complete, although it is very detailed - see editorial comment below on > Section 3. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Sections 3.1-3.3 dive into the details very quickly. They would be easier to > understand if there was an overview paragraph near the start of Section 3 that > describes the roles of the two ADMIN_STATUS flags and the two LSP Attributes > flags in OAM configuration (establishment, change/adjustment, deletion) before > the current text that contains the details of RSVP message processing. > > There are a number of instances of "(IANA to assign)" in section 4 that the > RFC Editor will need to remove - an RFC Editor note to that effect should > be inserted at the start of Section 4. > > Section 4.5 is necessarily incomplete on P2MP considerations, because (as > it says) "P2MP OAM mechanisms are very specific to the data plane technology". > It would be helpful if section 4.5 contained language indicating what a > specific data plane specification should include to completely specify > P2MP OAM configuration for that data plane. > > idnits 2.13.01 didn't find anything that needs attention. > > Thanks, > --David > ---------------------------------------------------- > David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer > EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 > +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 > david.black at emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 > ----------------------------------------------------