Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-12

Request Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-10-22
Requested 2013-10-17
Authors Sergio Belotti, Pietro Grandi, Daniele Ceccarelli, Diego Caviglia, Fatai Zhang, Dan Li
Draft last updated 2013-10-25
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -11 by Christer Holmberg (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Christer Holmberg (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -11 by Warren Kumari (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Christer Holmberg 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-12-genart-telechat-holmberg-2013-10-25
Reviewed rev. 12 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2013-10-25


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Document:                         draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-12

Reviewer:                           Christer Holmberg

Review Date:                     24 October

IETF LC End Date:             19 September, 2013

IESG Telechat date:         24 October


Summary:           The document is well written, and ready for publication, but I think one of the editorial nit I previously raised is still not addressed.


Major issues: -


Minor issues: -


Nits/editorial comments:






        Q_G_1: The document still uses inconsistent terminology when referencing ITU-T specifications. Examples:


            - G.709 [G.709-2012]

            - [G.709-2012]

            - ITU-T G.872 recommendation [G.872]

            - G.709-2012

            - ITU-T G.798 [G.798]

            etc etc...


        When I sent my previous review, you suggestion was to use "

ITU-T recommendation G.XXX used on first use and then just G.XXX".