Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-
review-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-genart-lc-even-2012-08-16-00

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Document:

draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05.

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012–8–12

IETF LC End Date: 2012–8–17

IESG Telechat date:



Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as

 a standard track

RFC

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Major issues:



Minor issues:

In section 6.1 “ If specified more than once, instances preceding the first
will be ignored and condition SHOULD be logged for possible action by the
network operator.”  I am not sure what is meant by preceding the first.





Nits/editorial comments:



The following note appears in section 10.1, 10.2 and 10.3. “Note that the same
values for the Inter-RA Export Upward sub-TLV and the Inter-RA Export Downward
Sub-TLV MUST be used when they appear in the Link TLV, Node Attribute TLV, and
Router Address TLV.” – why not have it in section 10 before section 10.1.

I saw in appendix  B that one of the changes from RFC 5787 was to clarify the
terminology before defining extensions, I would have found it easier to read if
the ASON hierarchy and the relation to OSPF in section 2 were presented in
figures. This was more an issue to me as a reader not familiar with the
terminology and I would like to think that the more familiar reader will not
have problem.