Telechat Review of draft-ietf-dane-ops-14
review-ietf-dane-ops-14-genart-telechat-davies-2015-09-21-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-dane-ops
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 16)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-08-03
Requested 2015-07-02
Authors Viktor Dukhovni, Wes Hardaker
Draft last updated 2015-09-21
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -12 by Elwyn Davies (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -14 by Elwyn Davies (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Tina Tsou (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -12 by Fred Baker (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Elwyn Davies
State Completed
Review review-ietf-dane-ops-14-genart-telechat-davies-2015-09-21
Reviewed rev. 14 (document currently at 16)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2015-09-21

Review
review-ietf-dane-ops-14-genart-telechat-davies-2015-09-21

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Document: draft-ietf-dane-ops-14.txt
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2015/08/02
IETF LC End Date:
IESG Telechat date: 2015/08/06

Summary:


Ready with nits.  This version clears up most of the issues that I had 


with -12 except that I am slightly wary of the extensive usage of RFC 


2118 keywords in contexts that appear to be operational guidance and may 


not be enforceable by implementations of the basic DANE protocol.  There 


are a couple of left over and/or introduced nits that didn't get fixed 


from -13 to -14.




Major issues:

Minor issues:


I am not totally convinced about the remaining usage of RFC 2118 


keywords, but I'll leave that for the ADs  to consider.




Nits/editorial comments:



There are a couple of nits introduced by the edits (or left over from 


the previous version):




s3, para 2: s/ When a servers does/When a server does/,
                   s/SHOULD respond/the server SHOULD respond/

s8, para 3, last sentence: s/the only other/The only other/



s10.1, next to last para:  s/as when significantly/as the full 


certificates are significantly/




s12, bullet 4: s/to processes extended/to  process extended/

s14, last para: s/PKIX-TA(0(/PKIX-TA(0)/