Last Call Review of draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-05
review-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-05-genart-lc-evens-2020-04-20-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2020-04-23
Requested 2020-04-09
Authors Balazs Varga , Lou Berger , Don Fedyk , Stewart Bryant , Jouni Korhonen
I-D last updated 2020-04-20
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -04 by Tomonori Takeda (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Tim Evens (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -07 by Vincent Roca (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -05 by Brian Trammell (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Tim Evens
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/y4N9ORyUOImqgWZ3UeBN2LfD_WQ
Reviewed revision 05 (document currently at 09)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2020-04-20
review-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-05-genart-lc-evens-2020-04-20-00
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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-??
Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review Date: 2020-04-20
IETF LC End Date: 2020-04-23
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Some of the references refer to older revisions.  

Abbreviations:
* T-PE is referenced several times but not defined.
* d-CW is referenced in Figure 3 but not defined. 
* S-Label is referenced several times but not defined.


Figure 1 and 2 have the same label.

In Section 4.2:

* There is reference to section 5.1.1 and 5.1.2, but those sections 
do not exist in this draft.  Can you clarify which draft/RFC these
sections are referring to? 

* "Per [I-D.ietf-detnet-mpls], the DetNet MPLS data plane uses a single
   S-Label to support a single app flow.  Section 5.1.  DetNet IP Flow
   Identification Procedures ..."  

   Why is Section 5.1 referenced like this?

* "DetNet IP Flow Identification Procedures in [I-D.ietf-detnet-ip] states
   that a single DetNet flow is identified based on IP, and next level
   protocol, header information.  Section 4.4.  Aggregation..."  
   
   It would be more clear to specifically refer to the draft/rfc and section.