Last Call Review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06
review-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06-genart-lc-holmberg-2020-09-01-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2020-09-10
Requested 2020-08-27
Authors Balazs Varga, János Farkas, Lou Berger, Andy Malis, Stewart Bryant
Draft last updated 2020-09-01
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -04 by Harish Sitaraman (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -06 by Christer Holmberg (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -06 by Joerg Ott (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -06 by Dan Romascanu (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -06 by Stephen Farrell (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Christer Holmberg 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06-genart-lc-holmberg-2020-09-01
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/dC9d4Svsf991mlkGJpCv9aaZ9-k
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 07)
Review result Almost Ready
Review completed: 2020-09-01

Review
review-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06-genart-lc-holmberg-2020-09-01

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2020-09-01
IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-10
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: In general I think the document is almost ready for publication, but I have a few minor issues and nits that I would like the authors to address.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues:

Q1: In the last paragraph of Section 4, there is a statement from RFC 7510 aboout MPLS-in-UDP not being allowed on the general Internet etc. I think it should be explicitly indicated whether that also applies to this document. The document talks about "IP networks", but it is unclear what the scope really is. And, if  the RFC 7510 statement does apply to this document, I think it shall be stated much earlier: either in the Introduction, or in a dedicated Applicability Section.

Nits/editorial comments:

Q2: In the Introduction, I like to have the this-document-does-this-and-that text at the end. If possible, please consider moving the 2nd paragraph to the end of the Section.

Q3: The first sentence of Section 3 says:

    "This document builds on the specification of MPLS over UDP defined in [RFC7510]." 

...and Section 4 says "MPLS over UDP/IP encapsulation".

RFC 7510 talks about MPLS-in-UDP, so please align the terminology.