Last Call Review of draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-02-10
Requested 2017-01-27
Other Reviews Intdir Early review of -03 by Jean-Michel Combes (diff)
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Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-02-17
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Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready with Issues
Draft last updated 2017-02-17
Review completed: 2017-02-17

Review
review-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-02-17

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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-hnprenum-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-02-10
IETF LC End Date:   2017-02-10
IESG Telechat date: -


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-Abstract:
Current:
"However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering is happened.".
Suggestion for more clarity:
"However, the current PMIPv6 specification does not specify related operations when an HNP renumbering has happened (e.g. due to change of service provider, change of site topology, etc.).".
-[Page 3], "to an MAG"---->"to a MAG"

-[Page 7], "the proceduer"--->"the procedure"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com