Last Call Review of draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-03
review-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-03-tsvart-lc-trammell-2019-11-28-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Last Call Review
Team Transport Area Review Team (tsvart)
Deadline 2019-12-02
Requested 2019-11-18
Authors Tim Wicinski
Draft last updated 2019-11-28
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Stephen Farrell (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -03 by Brian Trammell (diff)
Intdir Telechat review of -04 by Jean-Michel Combes (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Brian Trammell 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-03-tsvart-lc-trammell-2019-11-28
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/xacm36-lvfVCrzvQotW6Awu-RVY
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-11-28

Review
review-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-03-tsvart-lc-trammell-2019-11-28

This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
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This draft is ready for publication from a transport point of view. I have minor nits / suggestions:

(1) References to QUIC imply that work is underway to build DNS over QUIC; while this has been suggested, there is to my knowledge no ongoing specification or implementation of such an application. There should be some additional text pointing out this context where QUIC is first mentioned.

(2) The references have some typos (e.g. [pitfalls-of-dns-encrption]) and are occasionally oddly named (e.g. [firefox] for a Mozilla announcement about DoH); suggest reviewing these.