Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 27)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-01-06
Requested 2016-12-16
Other Reviews Secdir Last Call review of -21 by Dacheng Zhang (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -21 by Nevil Brownlee (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -23 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/TWnX5NmmiBmSTN5TT3P_Rzqcm4w
Reviewed rev. 21 (document currently at 27)
Review result Ready with Nits
Last updated 2017-01-06

Review
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06

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Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-01-05
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
-I find the document could be clearer if put in context with other documents related to the topic/if any.
-By eCall do we mean voice and video calls? (is emergency sms another possibility?)

Nits/editorial comments:
-General: "next-generation eCall" and "NG-eCall" are both used. Would be clearer to use only one.
-[Page 10], "PSAP interpets"--typo-->"PSAP interprets"
-[Page 13], "package to accomodate"--typo-->"package to accommodate"
-[Page 17], "how it it used"----->"how it is used"
-[Page 17], "when it is is required"----->"when it is required"
-[Page 18], "it is is required"----->"it is required"  (two occurrences)
-[Page 18], "how it it used."----->"how it is used." (two occurrences)
-[Page 37], "Based on the the"---->"Based on the"




Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com