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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 27)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-01-06
Requested 2016-12-16
Authors Randall Gellens , Hannes Tschofenig
I-D last updated 2017-01-06
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -21 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -21 by Dacheng Zhang (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -21 by Nevil Brownlee (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -23 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 21 (document currently at 27)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2017-01-06
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06-00
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Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-01-05
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have
comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
-I find the document could be clearer if put in context with other documents
related to the topic/if any. -By eCall do we mean voice and video calls? (is
emergency sms another possibility?)

Nits/editorial comments:
-General: "next-generation eCall" and "NG-eCall" are both used. Would be
clearer to use only one. -[Page 10], "PSAP interpets"--typo-->"PSAP interprets"
-[Page 13], "package to accomodate"--typo-->"package to accommodate" -[Page
17], "how it it used"----->"how it is used" -[Page 17], "when it is is
required"----->"when it is required" -[Page 18], "it is is required"----->"it
is required"  (two occurrences) -[Page 18], "how it it used."----->"how it is
used." (two occurrences) -[Page 37], "Based on the the"---->"Based on the"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com