Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 27) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2017-01-06 | |
Requested | 2016-12-16 | |
Authors | Randall Gellens , Hannes Tschofenig | |
I-D last updated | 2017-01-06 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -21
by Meral Shirazipour
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Secdir Last Call review of -21 by Dacheng Zhang (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -21 by Nevil Brownlee (diff) Genart Telechat review of -23 by Meral Shirazipour (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Meral Shirazipour |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 21 (document currently at 27) | |
Result | Ready w/nits | |
Completed | 2017-01-06 |
review-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-01-06-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2017-01-05 IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06 IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments. Major issues: Minor issues: -I find the document could be clearer if put in context with other documents related to the topic/if any. -By eCall do we mean voice and video calls? (is emergency sms another possibility?) Nits/editorial comments: -General: "next-generation eCall" and "NG-eCall" are both used. Would be clearer to use only one. -[Page 10], "PSAP interpets"--typo-->"PSAP interprets" -[Page 13], "package to accomodate"--typo-->"package to accommodate" -[Page 17], "how it it used"----->"how it is used" -[Page 17], "when it is is required"----->"when it is required" -[Page 18], "it is is required"----->"it is required" (two occurrences) -[Page 18], "how it it used."----->"how it is used." (two occurrences) -[Page 37], "Based on the the"---->"Based on the" Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com