Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04
review-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04-genart-lc-korhonen-2016-02-04-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-held-routing
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-01-28
Requested 2016-01-14
Authors James Winterbottom, Hannes Tschofenig, Laura Liess
Draft last updated 2016-02-04
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -04 by Jouni Korhonen (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -04 by Paul Hoffman (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jouni Korhonen 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04-genart-lc-korhonen-2016-02-04
Reviewed rev. 04 (document currently at 05)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2016-02-04

Review
review-ietf-ecrit-held-routing-04-genart-lc-korhonen-2016-02-04

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- Jouni

Summary:
	This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
 	that should be fixed before publication. The nits are only
 	editorial.

Comments:

I do have little expertise on ECRIT topics in general so bear with me.

* The I-D gives IDnits errors and stuff and those must be corrected.
  Specifically those that concern the abstract, updating RFCs and such.

* Starting from Section 1 (Intro) most of the acronyms are not expanded
  on the first use.. or at all in the document. Revisit all acronyms
  including HELD, LoST etc and expand them on the first use.

* The sentence on line 185 (IDnits) took me a while to parse ;) Maybe
  some rewording would make it a bit more readable.

* There is no reference to "forest guide". I would expect to see one
  and at least a note that it is a special instance of a LoST server.

* In Section 4 URN is written multiple times as "urn".

* On line 290 s/PSAPS/PSAPs

* On lines 304 and 310 s/section/Section

* On line 462 s/Layer 7/layer-7