Last Call Review of draft-ietf-eman-framework-15
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Document:                                   draft-ietf-eman-framework-15.txt

Reviewer:                                     Christer Holmberg

Review Date:                               24 February 2014

IETF LC End Date:                       24 February 2014

IESG Telechat date:                   N/A



Summary:                                     I have no major issues with the
document, but I have a few editorial comments that I ask the authors to
consider addressing.

Major issues: -



Minor issues: -



Nits/editorial comments:







Section 4:

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Q4_1:                 The 3

rd

 picture (Single Power Supply with Multiple Devices) is split between two
 pages. Would it be possible to make sure the whole picture is on a single page?



Q4_2:                 In the 4

th

 picture (Multiple Power Supplies with Single Devices), there are two “######”
 lines between ‘power source 1’ and ‘device’? Is there a  reason for that?





Section 5:

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Q5_1:                 I think it would be useful to have a few general words
about what is not covered also in the Abstract and Introduction.





Section 6.2:

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Q6_2_1:            Within section 6.2, and the subclasses, do you need to
indicate ‘(Class)’? The section name already indicates ‘(Class)’?



Q6_2_2:            Shall ‘Component (Component)’ be ‘Component (Class)’?





Section 6.3:

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Q6_3_1:            For section 6.3.2, I suggest to change the section title
from ‘Context in General’ to ‘Context: General’, to be aligned with the other
Context related attributes.





Regards,



Christer