Last Call Review of draft-ietf-eman-requirements-10
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Request Review of draft-ietf-eman-requirements
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 14)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-01-25
Requested 2013-01-17
Authors Juergen Quittek , Mouli Chandramouli , Rolf Winter , Thomas Dietz , Benoît Claise
I-D last updated 2013-01-28
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -10 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Magnus Nyström (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-eman-requirements by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 10 (document currently at 14)
Result Ready
Completed 2013-01-28
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Document: draft-ietf-eman-requirements-10.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20130125
IETF LC End Date: 20120125
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2: very inconsistent use of caps: I propose to put the first letter
  of all words in upper cases. And of course apply this to titles (in the very
  unlikely case the ToC is not auto generated)

 - ToC page 3 and 11 page 23: Acknowledgements -? Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 4: IT -> Information Technology

 - 1 page 4 and others: why Power State and not power state? I believe it
  comes from a document where you imported the term from?

 - 12 pages 23 and 24: Telcommunication -> Telecommunication (twice)

 - Authors' Addresses: please use the full names of countries (surface mail
  was not yet converted to ISO IS 3166 as far as I know :), so:
   DE -> Germany
   IN -> India (or Republic of India?)
   BE -> Belgium

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr