Last Call Review of draft-ietf-emu-eap-session-id-03
review-ietf-emu-eap-session-id-03-opsdir-lc-dodge-2020-05-24-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-emu-eap-session-id
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2020-05-27
Requested 2020-05-13
Authors Alan DeKok
Draft last updated 2020-05-24
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Mališa Vučinić (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -04 by Peter Yee (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -03 by Menachem Dodge (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Menachem Dodge 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-emu-eap-session-id-03-opsdir-lc-dodge-2020-05-24
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/c5GnJer3QT1lLqeaMfVe72qtZ2I
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 07)
Review result Has Nits
Review completed: 2020-05-24

Review
review-ietf-emu-eap-session-id-03-opsdir-lc-dodge-2020-05-24

The document is well written and clearly expressed.

I have a couple of nits:

1. The paragraphing could be made clearer in my opinion. "Section 2.3 Rationale" is the Rationale for sections 2.1 and 2.2 so I would put this in the section header, "Section 2.3 Rationale for EAP-AKA and EAP-SIM updates". it may be worth putting Section 2.4 as a separate numbering like 3. "Session-Id for PEAP" to keep it separate from 2.1, 2.2 and 2.3.

2. Is  "Rationale" needed for the section 2.4 "Session-Id for PEAP"?  I suppose that as it is missing altogether the "rationale" is implied but it may be worth adding a sentence to keep consistency in the document.