Last Call Review of draft-ietf-extra-6855bis-03
review-ietf-extra-6855bis-03-genart-lc-housley-2024-08-22-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-extra-6855bis |
|---|---|---|
| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 04) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2024-08-29 | |
| Requested | 2024-08-15 | |
| Authors | Pete Resnick , Jiankang Yao , Arnt Gulbrandsen | |
| I-D last updated | 2024-08-22 | |
| Completed reviews |
Secdir Last Call review of -03
by Chris M. Lonvick
(diff)
Artart Last Call review of -03 by Joseph Yee (diff) Genart Last Call review of -03 by Russ Housley (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Russ Housley |
| State | Completed | |
| Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-extra-6855bis by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
| Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/X6yQs5wQ_Ts3yK5imnXf5rH_V3I | |
| Reviewed revision | 03 (document currently at 04) | |
| Result | Ready w/nits | |
| Completed | 2024-08-22 |
review-ietf-extra-6855bis-03-genart-lc-housley-2024-08-22-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-extra-6855bis-03 Reviewer: Russ Housley Review Date: 2024-08-22 IETF LC End Date: 2024-08-29 IESG Telechat date: Unknown Summary: Ready with Nits Major Concerns: None. Minor Concerns: Section 6: I think it would be helpful to add a phrase to introduce the ABNF. I suggest: This document extends the media-message ABNF production to match [RFC9051] as follows: In addition, consider the use of <sourcecode type="abnf">. Acknowledgments: Is seems very odd to talk about Jiankang Yao replacing Sean Shen as an author but be silent about Arnt Gulbrandsen replacing Chris Newman. Nits: Section 1: s/[RFC3501}}/[RFC3501]/ Section 6: s/has been enabled/are in use/ (This makes the text parallel with the next paragraph.)