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Telechat Review of draft-ietf-forces-interop-08

Request Review of draft-ietf-forces-interop
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-05-28
Requested 2013-05-16
Authors Weiming Wang , Kentaro Ogawa , Evangelos Haleplidis , Ming Gao , Jamal Hadi Salim
I-D last updated 2013-11-27
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -07 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -07 by Sam Hartman (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Ben Campbell
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-forces-interop by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 08 (document currently at 09)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2013-11-27
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Document:  draft-ietf-forces-interop-08
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2013-05-29
IETF LC End Date: 2013-05-30
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: This draft is mostly ready for publication as an informational RFC.
All of the substantive comments from my earlier review have been addressed. 
Some editorial issues remain. These are of the sort that the RFC editor can
probably fix, but if there are further iterations of the draft prior to
approval it might be worth addressing them.

Major issues:


Minor issues:


Nits/editorial comments:

-- I previously mentioned that the draft used inconsistent verb tenses to the
point of being confusing. The authors improved this by changing occurances most
to past tense. However, there were some places where the change was incorrect (
section 1 paragraph 1: "This document captures" was changed to "...
captured".). Also in at least one section (3.3), the previously past tense
verbs were changed to future tense.

-- There are a lot of missing articles, especially in text that is new to this

-- section 1, new paragraph 5: Up to date, the 'ForCES..."

I suggest changing "Up to date..." to "As of now..." or "As of the time of this
writing...". Or even better, remove it completely.