Last Call Review of draft-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis-09
review-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis-09-genart-lc-dupont-2015-12-25-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 11)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-12-28
Requested 2015-12-15
Authors Julien Laganier, Lars Eggert
Draft last updated 2015-12-25
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -09 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -10 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -09 by Takeshi Takahashi (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -10 by Takeshi Takahashi (diff)
Intdir Early review of -09 by Jouni Korhonen (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Qin Wu (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis-09-genart-lc-dupont-2015-12-25
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 11)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2015-12-25

Review
review-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis-09-genart-lc-dupont-2015-12-25

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Document: draft-ietf-hip-rfc5203-bis-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20151218
IETF LC End Date: 20151228
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 2 page 3: (comment!) I looked at if the re-registration is a refresh or
  a renew (I worked too long on DHCP these times :-): it is soft state
  so I agree the term refresh is the right one.

 - 3.3 page 4: the short description of what is "valid and accepted"
  for a certificate is very loose. I don't know if it will be enough
  for the security directorate... wait and see?

 - 4.[2-5] pages 6 to 9: the section titles should be at the beginning of
  the page, not at the end. Note the formatting will be fixed by the
  RFC Editor anyway.

 - 4.[2-5] pages 7 to 10: there is no details about the padding, e.g.,
  the padding is for a length which is a multiple of 8 bytes. IMHO
  you should add a reference to RFC 7401 section 5.2 "HIP Parameters"
  in section 4 so someone who wants a response to this question
  (or why types are even) knows where to go.

Regards (and Merry Christmas)

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr