Last Call Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-07
review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-07-29
Requested 2015-07-16
Authors Markus Stenberg , Steven Barth
I-D last updated 2015-07-30
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -07 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -10 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -07 by Victor Kuarsingh (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -09 by Victor Kuarsingh (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Les Ginsberg (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -05 by Thomas H. Clausen (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Lizhong Jin (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-homenet-dncp by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 07 (document currently at 12)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2015-07-30
review-ietf-homenet-dncp-07-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-07-30-00

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Document: draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2015-07-29

IETF LC End Date:  2015-07-29

IESG Telechat date: NA





Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some
comments .





Major issues:



Minor issues:



Nits/editorial comments:



-Abstract, suggestion:

"uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm"



-Abstract, suggestion:

"DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and"



-[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network
of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval"

it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is
meant by these terms.



-[Page 3], "specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method"



-[Page 10], "higher then"---->"higher than"



-[Page 28], "Certifcate"---->"Certificate"



-Please consider adding caption and title to all figures.



Best Regards,

Meral

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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson

Research

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