Last Call Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12
review-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12-genart-lc-dupont-2016-02-29-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 14)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-02-24
Requested 2016-02-11
Authors Mark Nottingham, Patrick McManus, Julian Reschke
Draft last updated 2016-02-29
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -12 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Chris Lonvick (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12-genart-lc-dupont-2016-02-29
Reviewed rev. 12 (document currently at 14)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2016-02-29

Review
review-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12-genart-lc-dupont-2016-02-29

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Document: draft-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20160226
IETF LC End Date: 20160224
IESG Telechat date: 20160303

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC 3 and B page 24: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 6 page 13: my spell checker complains about idempotency because
  it believes the term doesn't exist. Looking in the web it seems
  to be an accepted (and IMHO well understood) new term...
  In conclusion I have no concern if you keep it. Note if you have
  a language expert you can ask if idempotence is better (I am French
  so I am afraid I have a bias in favor of this alternative because
  it is its spelling in French :-).

 - 9.2 page 17: e.g. -> e.g.,

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr