Last Call Review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13
review-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13-genart-lc-kyzivat-2017-12-01-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 16)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-12-11
Requested 2017-11-27
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Rtgdir Early review of -10 by Michael Richardson (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -13 by Hilarie Orman (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Paul Kyzivat
Review review-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13-genart-lc-kyzivat-2017-12-01
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/QcrsJw7upa4sFWedFnD2SWS_nmc
Reviewed rev. 13 (document currently at 16)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2017-12-01
Review completed: 2017-12-01

Review
review-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13-genart-lc-kyzivat-2017-12-01

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Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l3-topology-13
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2017-12-01
IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-11
IESG Telechat date: TBD

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should 
be fixed before publication.

Disclaimer:

I conducted this review without any knowledge of YANG modeling. So the 
sort of review I can do is superficial.

Issues:

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits:  2

(1) NIT: Section 1 - Language

s/example model is/an example model is/
s/full-blown OSPF model/a complete OSPF model/
s/augments general network/augments the general network/


(2) NIT: Section 4 - typo

Something is wrong with:

    The YANG modules ietf-network and ietf-network are designed to be
    used in conjunction with implementations that support the Network

Did you perhaps mean:

    The YANG modules ietf-network and ietf-network-topology are ...