Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
review-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-07-19-00

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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-07-08
Requested 2016-06-30
Other Reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
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Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-07-19
Posted at https://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/gen-art/current/msg13432.html
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2016-07-19
Review completed: 2016-07-19

Review
review-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2016-07-19






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Document:  draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2016-07-05




IETF LC End Date:  2016-07-08




IESG Telechat date: NA




 




 




Summary:




This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some comments.




 




Major issues:




 




Minor issues:




 




Nits/editorial comments:




-[Page 2], "arguable be better"---->"arguably be better"




-[Page 2], "types know"---->"types known"




-[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice?




-[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to be updated to latest version.




-Also on [Page 4] Reference to "section 4.1.2.1" of [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be good to list the section title too (in case the numbering changes in the final version).




 




Best Regards,




Meral




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Meral Shirazipour




Ericsson Research




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