Last Call Review of draft-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid-10
review-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid-10-genart-lc-yee-2018-01-31-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 27)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-01-26
Requested 2018-01-12
Draft last updated 2018-01-31
Completed reviews Rtgdir Early review of -04 by Christian Hopps (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -04 by Bruno Decraene (diff)
Secdir Early review of -13 by Brian Weis (diff)
Rtgdir Telechat review of -11 by Tony Przygienda (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -10 by Peter Yee (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Peter Yee (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -21 by Bruno Decraene (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -21 by Peter Yee (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Peter Yee
State Completed
Review review-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid-10-genart-lc-yee-2018-01-31
Reviewed rev. 10 (document currently at 27)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2018-01-31

Review
review-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid-10-genart-lc-yee-2018-01-31

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Document: draft-ietf-idr-bgp-prefix-sid-10
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2018-01-31
IETF LC End Date: 2018-01-26
IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-08

Summary: This draft specifies an optional BGP attribute for use with Segment Routing.  It's well written and reable, although I make no claims to being an expert in this area.  The draft is ready for publication but has some nits that should be fixed (really nothing major).

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

General:

Change "extendibility" to "extensibility" throughout the document.

Change "First Come, First Served" (with varying hyphenation) to simply "first-come, first-served" in a few places.  Meaning making it lower case and hyphenate consistently.

Specific.

Page 3, Section 1, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change the colon to a comma.

Page 3, Section 1, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: append comma after the close parenthesis, "label", and "Dataplane".

Page 4, Section 1, 4th paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the comma.

Page 4, Section 1, 4th paragraph, last sentence: consider making "Segment" lower case for consistency with previous usage.

Page 4, Section 2.1, 2nd indented paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "to use" to "using".

Page 7, Section 3.2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: should the uses of "will be" throughout the document be changed to "MUST"?

Page 8, 2nd bullet item (Length): insert "a" before "multiple".

Page 9, Section 4, 1st sentence: delete the comma.

Page 9, Section 4.1, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete "as".

Page 10, Section 4.2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete the first "the".

Page 12, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "Similarily" to "Similarly".

Page 12, Section 7, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "to" before the first "the".