Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
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Document: draft-ietf-ipsecme-rfc7321bis-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-03-14
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-15
IESG Telechat date: 2017-03-16

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards RFC, but I have some
comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 4], "downgraded from MUST to MUST-". MUST- is defined later in the
document. Perhaps a reference in the text should point to that section on p.5.
-[Page 7], "were not been mentioned"---->"have not been mentioned" -[Page 7],
"this document clarify"---->"this document clarifies" -[Page 11], "that
revisions of that"---->"that revisions of this"

-general, some acronyms are not spelled out...VPN, MTU..
-Tables P.5,6,8,9,10. Giving them a caption would make the document clearer.

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com