Telechat Review of draft-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community-09
review-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community-09-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-02-09-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-02-03
Requested 2015-01-22
Authors Jim Uttaro, Prodosh Mohapatra, David Smith, Robert Raszuk, John Scudder
Draft last updated 2015-02-09
Completed reviews Genart Telechat review of -09 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -08 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community-09-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-02-09
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 10)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2015-02-09

Review
review-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community-09-genart-telechat-dupont-2015-02-09

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http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

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Document: draft-ietf-l3vpn-acceptown-community-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150206
IETF LC End Date: 20141208
IESG Telechat date: 20150205

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Abstract page 1: VRF and PE are not well known abbrevs
  (cf 

http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt

)

 - Abstract page 1 (style): I suggest:
   that is distributed by the route reflector
   ->
   that the route reflector distributes

 - Abstract page 1 (style):
   on the same PE as -> on the same PE than

 - Abstract page 1 (style):
   (second) allowing the technique to be used -> and to be used

 - 1 page 2: same comment about "that is distributed"

 - 1 page 3: the abbrev PE (Provider Edge) must be introduced at its
  first use (in the body of the document).

 - 3 page 4: i.e. -> i.e.,

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr