Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lamps-cmp-updates-18
review-ietf-lamps-cmp-updates-18-opsdir-lc-bhandari-2022-05-13-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-lamps-cmp-updates |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 23) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | Ops Directorate (opsdir) | |
Deadline | 2022-05-11 | |
Requested | 2022-04-27 | |
Authors | Hendrik Brockhaus , David von Oheimb , John Gray | |
I-D last updated | 2022-05-13 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -18
by Linda Dunbar
(diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -18 by Shwetha Bhandari (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Shwetha Bhandari |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-lamps-cmp-updates by Ops Directorate Assigned | |
Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/1gBn8IFs4UuGSlICJ5GvadXRrSE | |
Reviewed revision | 18 (document currently at 23) | |
Result | Has nits | |
Completed | 2022-05-13 |
review-ietf-lamps-cmp-updates-18-opsdir-lc-bhandari-2022-05-13-00
I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the IESG review. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other last call comments. Summary: This document updates Certificate Management Protocol (CMP) described in RFC 4210, RFC 5912, RFC 6712. It defines the syntax of the Certificate Management Protocol(CMP) version 3. There is no change in operations or manageability functions of the CMP in this update. Hence the changes look mostly fine from the ops-dir review. A few questions: 1) Overall it is quite confusing on how these updates will be published - will there be bis for each RFC4210, RFC5912 and RFC6712? 2) The sections that update RFC6712 - There seems to be circular dependency between this draft and draft-ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile. Assuming the RFC6712 updates will be published as RFC6712 bis, Section 3.6. HTTP Request-URI: " Further path segments, e.g., as specified in the Lightweight CMP Profile [I-D.ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile], could indicate PKI management operations using an operationLabel <operation>. A valid full CMP URI can look like this:..." This text is redundant and confusing as the operationLabel <operation> is only defined in draft-ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile. Why should it be referenced in 6712 bis? 6712 bis with the text changes proposed in this draft does not restrict extension of the URI path. 3) General question on CMP server operations and management - is there a document that covers data model, APIs to configure and collect operational statistics of a CMP server? I could not find one. IF there is one, how will these updates impact that.