Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lamps-cms-hash-sig-08
review-ietf-lamps-cms-hash-sig-08-opsdir-lc-clarke-2019-07-17-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-lamps-cms-hash-sig
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2019-08-01
Requested 2019-07-11
Authors Russ Housley
I-D last updated 2019-07-17
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -08 by Dale R. Worley (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -08 by Joe Clarke (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Radia Perlman (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Joe Clarke
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-lamps-cms-hash-sig by Ops Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/asE9gB9SUw1OZFo2ELNScovO9mo
Reviewed revision 08 (document currently at 10)
Result Ready
Completed 2019-07-17
review-ietf-lamps-cms-hash-sig-08-opsdir-lc-clarke-2019-07-17-00
I have been assigned to review this document as part of the ops directorate. 
This document describes conventions for using the HSS/LMS with CMS.  Overall,
this document is well-written, and I appreciate the considerations around
signing size and computation in the introduction.  This will help operators
properly evaluate the use of this algorithm.  I did find a few small nits.  One
thing that struck me on the first read is that you have to get to the
Introduction before HSS/LMS are expanded whereas CMS is expanded in the
abstract.  Might I suggest you expand HSS and LMS in the abstract as well?

Other nits:

Abstract:

s/for using the the HSS/LMS/for using the HSS/LMS/

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Section 2.3:

s/When this object identifier is used for a HSS/LMS/When this object identifier
is used for an HSS/LMS/

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Section 6:

s/cause an one-time key/cause a one-time key/

s/When generating a LMS key pair/When generating an LMS key pair/