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Telechat Review of draft-ietf-lamps-ocsp-nonce-update-06
review-ietf-lamps-ocsp-nonce-update-06-artart-telechat-fenton-2024-05-03-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-lamps-ocsp-nonce-update
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Telechat Review
Team ART Area Review Team (artart)
Deadline 2024-05-14
Requested 2024-04-24
Authors himanshu sharma
I-D last updated 2024-05-03
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -04 by Joseph A. Salowey (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -07 by Joseph A. Salowey (diff)
Artart Telechat review of -06 by Jim Fenton (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Susan Hares (diff)
Artart Last Call review of -04 by Jim Fenton (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Ines Robles (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jim Fenton
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-lamps-ocsp-nonce-update by ART Area Review Team Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/art/N5K3jwJ-R-ePxTOUOEaeU3rjPEE
Reviewed revision 06 (document currently at 09)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-05-03
review-ietf-lamps-ocsp-nonce-update-06-artart-telechat-fenton-2024-05-03-00
I am the designated ARTART reviewer for this draft. This is a re-review of -06
following my review of -04.

Status: Ready with Nits

Thanks for addressing basically all of my comments from my earlier review. This
is ready to go, although I spotted a few more instances of the overuse of
"octets" in Section 2.1 that result in some awkward wording. Examples and
suggested replacements:

"...while the extnValue is the encoded value of Nonce octets" -> "...while the
extnValue is the encoded value of the nonce"

"...then the length of the Nonce octets MUST be..." -> "...then the length of
the nonce MUST be..."

"...MUST use a minimum length of 32 octets for Nonce octets in the Nonce
extension." -> "...MUST use a minimum length of 32 octets for the nonce in the
nonce extension."

"...that has a Nonce octets with a length..." -> "...that has a nonce with a
length..."

"The value of the Nonce octets MUST be..." -> "The value of the nonce MUST
be..."

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