Early Review of draft-ietf-lime-yang-connection-oriented-oam-model-03

Request Review of draft-ietf-lime-yang-connection-oriented-oam-model-01
Requested rev. 01 (document currently at 05)
Type Early Review
Team YANG Doctors (yangdoctors)
Deadline 2018-01-10
Requested 2017-12-13
Requested by Mehmet Ersue
Other Reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Joe Clarke
Carl Moberg reviewed earlier draft-ietf-lime-yang-oam-model, which is now replaced by draft-ietf-lime-yang-connection-oriented-oam-model. Carl should review again.
Review State Completed
Reviewer Carl Moberg
Review review-ietf-lime-yang-connection-oriented-oam-model-03-yangdoctors-early-moberg-2018-01-22
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/yang-doctors/S0QUtyvsj5uos8lEhBHDybfJ3pU
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 05)
Review result On the Right Track
Draft last updated 2018-01-22
Review completed: 2018-01-22


This is my review of draft-ietf-lime-yang-connection-oriented-oam-model-03 and
the included YANG module.

Overall, the document is in reasonable shape but needs more attention around
one fundamental aspect, and a short list of minor issues.

My understanding is that this module is intended to be implemented as a network
service model, per the module classification RFC (RFC8199). But e.g. the ‘mip'
list has a key 'interface' of type 'if:interface-ref'. That type is defined in
ietf-interfaces to be a leafref with path "/if:interfaces/if:interface/if:name”
assuming that the module context is a single network element. This seems
self-contradicting and needs to be resolved. 

I would suggest running the YANG module through 'pyang -f yang' to provide
consistent formatting of the module. I think it would also be worth considering
putting the content in the canonical order. E.g. the location of the description
statement in the mip-address grouping makes it hard to read.

The 'session' list is 'ordered-by user', but does not provide any description or
explanation to the meaning of the order.

The content of the description strings are in need of language fixes.