Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03
review-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2012-11-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-11-27
Requested 2012-11-15
Authors Luigi Iannone, Darrel Lewis, David Meyer, Vince Fuller
Draft last updated 2012-11-30
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -10 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -12 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -12 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2012-11-30
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 13)
Review result Ready with Issues
Review completed: 2012-11-30

Review
review-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2012-11-30






I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> .




 




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Document: draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03




Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour




Review Date: 2012-11-27




IETF LC End Date: 2012-11-27




IESG Telechat date: NA




 




Summary:




This draft is almost ready for publication but I have some editorial comments.




 




 




Nits/editorial comments:




[Page 5], paragraph 4, "((i.e., a Data " ----> please remove extra "("




[Page 6], paragraph 1, "By defining an IPv6 EID Block is possible" --missing 'it'--> "By defining an IPv6 EID Block it is possible "




[Page 6], paragraph 1, "the router so to natively" --remove 'so'--> "the router to natively"




[Page 6], paragraph 1, "while facilitating its large-scale deployment"---> can "its" be replaced by LISP's ?




[Page 6], Section 4 title, "Expected use" --upper case--> "Expected Use"




[Page 6], Section 4, "Too guarantee" --typo--> "To guarantee"




[Page 6], Section 5, line 1, "allocation of a /16 prefix" --clarity--> "allocation of a /16 IPv6 prefix"




[Page 7], Section 6,  "(Locator/ID Separation protocol)"--uppercase P--> "(Locator/ID Separation Protocol)"




 




 




Best Regards,




Meral




 




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Meral Shirazipour




Ericsson Research




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