Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03
review-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2012-11-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-11-27
Requested 2012-11-15
Authors Luigi Iannone , Darrel Lewis , David Meyer , Vince Fuller
I-D last updated 2012-11-30
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -10 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -12 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -12 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 03 (document currently at 13)
Result Ready w/issues
Completed 2012-11-30
review-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03-genart-lc-shirazipour-2012-11-30-00

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Document: draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2012-11-27

IETF LC End Date: 2012-11-27

IESG Telechat date: NA



Summary:

This draft is almost ready for publication but I have some editorial comments.





Nits/editorial comments:

[Page 5], paragraph 4, "((i.e., a Data " ----> please remove extra "("

[Page 6], paragraph 1, "By defining an IPv6 EID Block is possible" --missing
'it'--> "By defining an IPv6 EID Block it is possible "

[Page 6], paragraph 1, "the router so to natively" --remove 'so'--> "the router
to natively"

[Page 6], paragraph 1, "while facilitating its large-scale deployment"---> can
"its" be replaced by LISP's ?

[Page 6], Section 4 title, "Expected use" --upper case--> "Expected Use"

[Page 6], Section 4, "Too guarantee" --typo--> "To guarantee"

[Page 6], Section 5, line 1, "allocation of a /16 prefix" --clarity-->
"allocation of a /16 IPv6 prefix"

[Page 7], Section 6,  "(Locator/ID Separation protocol)"--uppercase P-->
"(Locator/ID Separation Protocol)"





Best Regards,

Meral



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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson Research

www.ericsson.com