Last Call Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11
review-ietf-lmap-framework-11-genart-lc-taylor-2015-03-09-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-lmap-framework |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 14) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2015-03-09 | |
Requested | 2015-02-25 | |
Authors | Philip Eardley , Al Morton , Marcelo Bagnulo , Trevor Burbridge , Paul Aitken, Aamer Akhter | |
I-D last updated | 2015-03-09 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -11
by Tom Taylor
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Secdir Early review of -08 by Radia Perlman (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -11 by Radia Perlman (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -11 by Sarah Banks (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Tom Taylor |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-lmap-framework by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 11 (document currently at 14) | |
Result | Ready w/nits | |
Completed | 2015-03-09 |
review-ietf-lmap-framework-11-genart-lc-taylor-2015-03-09-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11 Reviewer: Tom Taylor Review Date: 2015/03/05 IETF LC End Date: 2015/03/09 IESG Telechat date: 2015/03/12 Summary: Beautifully written and very complete. A few editorial nits that could be safely ignored without affecting the utility of the document. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: Section 3, "Logging Information": s/and which/which/ Section 5, bullet 1.: not sure a protocol is trying to achieve a problem. Achieve a solution to a problem (solve or resolve it) or achieve an objective, perhaps. Section 7, second paragraph: should delete the reference to the charter, since that is ephemeral information. I would rephrase as follows: s/similar to the protocol/just as is the protocol/