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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-manet-smf-mib-08
review-ietf-manet-smf-mib-08-secdir-lc-hanna-2013-10-24-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-manet-smf-mib
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team Security Area Directorate (secdir)
Deadline 2013-10-16
Requested 2013-10-03
Authors Robert Cole , Joseph P. Macker , Brian Adamson
I-D last updated 2013-10-24
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Steve Hanna (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -10 by Steve Hanna (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -10 by Jürgen Schönwälder (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Steve Hanna
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-manet-smf-mib by Security Area Directorate Assigned
Reviewed revision 08 (document currently at 13)
Result Has nits
Completed 2013-10-24
review-ietf-manet-smf-mib-08-secdir-lc-hanna-2013-10-24-00
I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's 
ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the 
IESG.  These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the 
security area directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat 
these comments just like any other last call comments.

While I am not an expert in SNMP, SMF, or MANET, I found this
document to be well-written and easy to understand. More relevant
to this review, the security of the protocol is adequate and
the Security Considerations section is exemplary.

I did notice two typos:

* In the Security Considerations section, the commentary on
  smfConfiguredOpMode includes the words "this writable
  configuration objects define". This should end in "object
  define", I think.

* In the Security Considerations section, the commentary on
  smfNhdpRssaMesgTLVIncluded includes the words "the the".
  Of course, that should be just "the".

With these corrections, I think the document is ready to publish.

Thanks,

Steve