Telechat Review of draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13
|Requested rev.||no specific revision (document currently at 13)|
|Team||General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)|
|Draft last updated||2013-09-08|
Genart Last Call review of -13 by Brian Carpenter
Genart Telechat review of -13 by Brian Carpenter
|Review result||Ready with Nits|
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq . Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt (Informational) Reviewer: Brian Carpenter Review Date: 2013-09-08 IETF LC End Date: 2013-09-03 IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-12 Summary: Ready -------- Comment: -------- This is a massive (175pp) and highly specialised document, for which a generalist review is pretty much useless. I have not checked the example flows, XML extracts, etc. IMHO, we have to trust the authors and the WG in a case like this. The document is clear and where I have sampled the text in the examples it is up to standard. This review is the same as for Last Call; my comments are just editorial suggestions. Editorial: ---------- There are a few abbreviations (AS, MS, CFW) that could usefully be included in the Terminology section. Also, AS is widely used in the IETF to mean Autonomous System. Some readers might be confused at first, so this should be stated very clearly. "Mealy automaton" (section 4.1) needs a reference. Or it might be sufficient just to say "finite state automaton."