Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mmusic-4572-update-11
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Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-4572-update-11
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2017-01-24
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-26
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready.  There are a couple of trivial nits mentioned below.  Given
that the draft has a minimal set of changes apart from the addition of two
sections, I have not read the unchanged pieces in detail

Major issues:
None

Minor issues:
None

Nits/editorial comments:
s1, para 2: s/TLS protocol/The TLS protocol/ (as per RFC 4572)

s4, para 2: s/a new protocol identifier/the protocol identifier/ (it isn't new
any more)

s5.1: Suggest s/m- line/"m" line/  for consistency with s3.4

s5.1, para 1: s/e.g./e.g.,/

s5.1, para 4: s/that each used certificate matches/that each certificate used
matches/

s5.1, para 5: s/each used certificate matches/each certificate used matches/

s8, para 5: ' This specification creates a new IANA registry named "Hash
Function Textual Names".' The registry is no longer new.  Perhaps s/creates a
new IANA registry/takes over the IANA registry from RFC 4572/