Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-egress-protection-framework-05

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-egress-protection-framework
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-06-17
Requested 2019-06-03
Authors Yimin Shen, Jeyananth Jeganathan, Bruno Decraene, Hannes Gredler, Carsten Michel, Huaimo Chen
Draft last updated 2019-06-20
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -03 by Sasha Vainshtein (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Christian Huitema (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Peter Yee (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Scott Bradner (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -06 by Christian Huitema (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Peter Yee
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mpls-egress-protection-framework-05-genart-lc-yee-2019-06-20
Posted at
Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-06-20


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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-egress-protection-framework-05
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2019-06-20
IETF LC End Date: 2019-06-17
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready with Nits.  I didn't really find any substantial issues with the document, although I admit this one is quite out of my area of expertise.  I'm reduced to making sure it sounds logical (it does) and trying to reduce the (future) burden on the RFC Editor.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:


For each occurrence of "e.g." and "i.e.", make sure that it is followed by a comma and a single space.  There are some occurrences of double spaces and pretty much no commas.

Change "aka." to "aka" or to "a.k.a."


Page 1, Abstract, 3rd sentence: change "context based" to "context-based".

Page 3, section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: change "repair based" to "repair-based".  Insert "and" before "[RFC7812]" or put the sequence of references inside of parentheses.  

Page 3, section 1, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete the comma and "i.e." after "PLR".  Put "point of local repair" in brackets.  Delete the comma and "i.e." after "MP" and place "merge point" inside brackets.

Page 7, section 4, 1st bullet item: append a comma after the first occurrence of "MP2P".

Page 7, section 4, 4th bullet item, 2nd sentence: insert "on a" before "per-service-destination".

Page 9, 1st bullet item: change "Or" to "or".

Page 10, 1st partial paragraph, last sentence: change "It" to "it".

Page 10, section 5.4, 2nd paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete extraneous space between "{E, P1}" and the following comma.

Page 11, section 5.7 title: change "context based" to "context-based".

Page 14, item 3, 4th sentence: change "any-cast" to "anycast".

Page 14, item 3, last sentence: I can't parse the end of that sentence.  Do you want one or the other of "to" and "in", or is there a word or words missing in there?

Page 15, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence: append "of" after "AS'".  And I'll just say that that's a very labored construction to avoid using "ASs" or "AS's" in the sentence.  It took be a while to parse what was meant.

Page 16, 1st full paragraph, 1st sentence: insert "the" before "PLR".

Page 18, 1st paragraph, last sentence: change the first occurrence of "in" to "if".

Page 19, 1st partial paragraph, 1st full sentence: change "Figure-3" to "Figure 3" to match the figure's actual labeling.

Page 21, section 8, 1st sentence: append a comma after "far".

Page 25, section 11, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "of" before "trust".